They locked her inside the soundproof room. She screamed, yelled, but her voice was blocked by the ringing in her ears. She began to slam the walls of the room, but soon, she was reduced to a slobbering wreck on the floor. Joan whimpered while crawling around the room, looking for something to feel. Her head bumped into something ceramic. A vase. She held in her tears, and touched the top. Joan felt its top. So as she lifted the lid, she heard sound escaping. She smiled as she realized the room was normal.
Joan was deaf her whole life.
What an interesting take on the prompt. Well done! You engaged me right from the start with your use of language and sentence structure. Whilst I had to re-read the ending a few times, this is a very successful piece of writing. Well done and make sure you keep writing.
Great Danya, I enjoyed reading your entry this week. What a great ideas. You have used the prompt well. I enjoyed reading it. Your ending left me in suspense and I wanted to know what was going to happen next.
I was hooked from the very first sentence. You created suspense excellently
with great sentence structure.You used strong vocabulary and used the promt in a very creative and interesting way.
I enjoyed reading it.
Keep it up!
Thankyou Danya.