Felicia laid out bird food onto the trunk, and could see that the eagle was holding her yellow scarf back. The eagle looked down at the food, and then looked at Felicia. “Really?” He asked. He was unimpressed with her negotiation skills. “I’d rather die of hunger than take your prize.” Felicia’s countenance switched from worry to anger, and so she walked right up to the bird, without fear. She looked it right in the eye, walked between it’s legs, and picked up her yellow scarf. “I’d rather be deaf than listen to your nonsense” She says to him, and leaves.
Danyal, this is an amazing piece of writing! You have got the terror of the situation together with the personalities of the characters just right. It is certainly a stand off! Brilliant!
I love your descriptions of Felicia’s anger.
BEST STORY EVA!!!!!!!!!!!
Great grammar Danyal.
Your’s sincerely,
Alexis
*I am a teacher
Cheers to all of you. This feedback is what pushes me forward.
This is a great story! It feels like the climax of an adventure book.
This is really good! You are a real comedian
I like your story, it had lots of good adjectives
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Nice story you used good description not much you need to work on.
Wow this was a great piece. It included a lot of analogies and it helped the story to seem more vivid.
i really liked the tense sensation when you and the eagle confronted each other and came up with insults
i really liked the tense sensation when Felicia confronted the eagle